Just read all of the Guardian Spirits today. I was disappointed it only lasted me a day of reading though. 
On the other hand I'm glad to hear it was interesting enough you read it in a single day
For some reason, I had gotten a vibe that the goddess Lorien was really more malicious than what she was made out to be.
She's not as black and white as her followers make her out to be, but she's not entirely evil either. It's something I wanted to give hints at, not really reveal right out since there are further stories coming.
The only criticism I would say, is that the ending seemed a bit rushed. Kinda was expecting more action from Derien after his show in Ramyn.
At the time I wrote it I was relatively happy with the ending, but as time has gone by I'd agree with you. The ending does need a bit of beefing up. It's something I plan to do once I have the third story done. I'll go through all three pieces and edit them with the experience gained from writing them and with the feedback I've gotten.
I'm very anxious to read your next long term story. However, I'd really like to see more of the characters from the Guardian Spirit.
Nala will be the main character in the story I'm writing after Voyage of Elwar Soran.
And there are several stories in my mind where she appears(several are hinted at in VoES, some including Cheid). Cheid will play a role in the story how Eleria became the empress of Ramyn. But these are stories I might get to next year at the earliest since it seems to take 3-4 months to finish a longer story.
