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Indirik

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Re: This should not happen
« Topic Start: December 19, 2012, 02:49:28 PM »
Your second paragraph looks OK.

To me, it doesn't look like your first paragraph changes are any clearer than the original version. This may be a situation where one way of saying something is clear to you, and a different way is clearer for someone else.
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