Of course, just my own opinion... doesn't make it right or wrong.
Your last recent RP I found to be more inviting to read. It is more pleasing to the eye and the shorter broken up paragraphs are more attractive to
me. I am more likely to give it my time. I sometimes get put off with seeing a looong drawn out paragraph to read through.
If I am writing a fairly long RP, I will always try to break it down into several continuing RP's rather than one huge one. Those players who are scanning through messages when time is precious, will tend to avoid long RP's I think.
Quite well written imo. Keep it up.
