Thanks for the tips and compliment. I took into account what Jdodger said and tried to separate the paragraphs as well as I could.
Typically when I write to a realm, I keep my roleplays very short, only on the occasion are they ever so big that you couldn't read it in 2 minutes.
I agree that with the passages broken apart, I feel less overwhelmed by the "Wall of words" factor. I wish I did this more, and I sure I can, it's just that I typically forget or neglect to do it.
I agree with Logar here on this one as well and don't worry you're not the only one who does it. I typically have the same problem as well. I just came back from the park and was just chillin and writing some of the backstory of Garas, but it's just walls on text (on paper actually, like that more when in the park) so I'll see if I can find some time to type it out for you to judge
But this version is indeed more appealing to read, although I much enjoyed the first ones as well.
